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Horror still inhabited itself inside of Natalie. She felt like someone had taken vacuum cleaner and sucked everything out of her. For the past couple of days she hadn’t been herself. Her hair wasn’t combed, her face was bare, and her clothes have been unkempt. Everything about her was a complete wreck. Two days ago when Robert had done the worst thing he could ever think of, everything inside of her snapped. It had been the last strong. She had tried so hard to give her relationship with Robert a try, but it always backfired. Now she was finally doing the hardest thing possible; she was leaving Robert. After leaving her on the floor in front of the fireplace, Robert went upstairs to their bedroom. Natalie couldn’t begin to think how terrified she was. She had been raped by her fiance. Not only that, but he had killed her dog. Seeing Copper’s charred body in the fireplace was burned in the back of her brain. She had to put out the fire herself and clean up the the dog’s remains. She was crying hysterically the whole time. She hadn’t cried that hard since her grandmother passed away when she was twelve.
When she went upstairs to the bedroom, she checked to see if Robert was asleep. Seeing that he was, she tip-toed out of the room and into the room which had all of her belongings. She had only took the essential things. First she gathered all of her novels, her frames, photos, albums, and gifts. Then she dragged out of her suitcase and started packing most of her clothes. It had taken nearly three hours for her to get everything ready. Afterward she crept back into the bedroom and crawled in beside Robert. The next day when he went to work, thinking she wouldn’t dare leave him, she retrieved all of her valuables and load them up into her luggage. She had asked the neighbor a few blocks away to drive her to the car place because she was "going on vacation to see her sick mother". When the neighbor was kind enough to do so, Natalie immediately paid for a silver Mitsubishi with the money her parents had put in her savings account and drove off. She had no idea why she was doing this. She knew it was a terrible idea because she had a feeling Robert would come looking for her, but she had to leave him. He was getting out of control. She didn’t have any regrets whatsoever.
She realized she had to go back to the place she knew best. It was the only place she felt safe in. Besides, there was no other place for her to go. Connecticut was basically calling for her to come back home. But she didn’t think she would remember James’ address to the point where he was the first person she went to.

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